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Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/08/15 01:43 pm Title: Welcome

Well that was... Umm... Interesting... You plan on doing more with this?

Author's Response: This story is pretty much finished. I'll be going back and editing it probably, but I don't have any plans for a sequel. Just a weirdo one-shot. Thansk for reading all the way through, it means a lot to me!

Author's Response: This story is pretty much finished. I'll be going back and editing it probably, but I don't have any plans for a sequel. Just a weirdo one-shot. Thansk for reading all the way through, it means a lot to me!

Reviewer: TmC Signed Report
Date: 10/08/15 03:33 am Title: Welcome

I loved it. Except for the excessive cursing.

Also I'm not sure if you got my email.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm still working on making my characters sound different (so I don't have to write "he said she said" all the time), and cussing is kind of a cop out way to do that. My other stories don't have nearly as much cussing. I just saw your email, it was in my junk folder for some reason. You're more than free to let me know how you think it could be improved. I'm fine with editing it even though it's marked as complete. Just shoot me an email if you have ideas.

Reviewer: TmC Signed Report
Date: 10/03/15 03:16 pm Title: Enter: Our (Anti-)Hero

Just watch a ton of anime. Some of The best fight scenes are in there.

Author's Response: Yeah, there are some good ones. I never really thought of them having a formula, but it makes sense in retrospect. Time to rewatch my childhood..

Reviewer: TmC Signed Report
Date: 10/03/15 06:26 am Title: Property Damage

Add some dialogue in between. If he really was mad over his brother's death he wouldn't just say nothing when he found the one responsible.

Switch locations during the fight. Makes it like a see-saw. One side has the upper hand then the other until one eventually triumphs. If he's so powerful then make him play with his enemy. Making them think they're winning.

Author's Response: Thanks! I love dialogue, how did I not think of that?! And the see-saw idea is great. When I go back through this, I'll take your advice. Again, thanks a bunch!

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/02/15 10:40 pm Title: Shower Thoughts

So another fight or just their powers going off?

Author's Response: It wouldn't be much of a cliffhanger if I just outright told you, would it?

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/30/15 09:34 am Title: The Hunt Begins

Well that was interesting....

Author's Response: Could you elaborate? I know Kai is a bit weird...

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 09/28/15 07:15 pm Title: Enter: Our (Anti-)Hero

(Added note: You can find my character (Jacks) in my TGR series over on DeviantArt.... There's a shortcut on my profile to my DA account... My chapters are fairly long, but split up in parts, and have been unable to continue them for some time due to lack of computer.)

I also recommend reading my protege's work (Kiroku09) over on DA as well.

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/27/15 08:20 pm Title: Enter: Our Host

What an interesting character, I happen to have a Reaper character of my own (elsewhere for the time being) that I have a story about....

Author's Response: It's always interested me how differently a simple idea for a character can be interpreted so differently between people. These reapers are more or less just ninjas from Naruto, with a twist. I'd be interested to read about your character, at some point. Thanks for reviewing, glad there's already some feedback!

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 09/27/15 08:10 pm Title: Enter: Our (Anti-)Hero

An interesting start, but needs to be longer... The longer the story, the more detail you can put into it...

Author's Response: yeah, I tend to write shorter prologue chapters than I should... The chapters get a bit longer, but all in all this story is actually pretty short. It's heavy, so I didn't want to make it unnecessarily long.

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