Date: 08/09/18 03:07 pm Title: Prologue - An Evening of Shadow
I don't know if the sibling relationship that you set up between the dragon and the boy really works in your favor here. They had some pretty apparent chemistry between each other initially and I believe that it would benefit the flow of the story if you toned down the brother/sister-act that they have going here and instead let them be free to get to know each other and journey further without any social restrictions.
Author's Response: Whatever romantic chemistry was absolutely unintended, as Riley and Kenny were always intended as brother/sister. In fact, one very specific obstacle in any romantic relationship for them will be brought up in the next chapter.
Date: 05/03/17 08:57 am Title: Interlude - Priestess of the Water
Just read this story today. I really enjoyed reading it so far. thanks for writing it. I am looking forward to reading more!
the only question I had was, back near the start, Riley was told that she became a girl due to receiving the "girl" potion by acident. however later in the story Irvine had a generic potion that seemed to turn the dragon into a human of whatever gender the original dragon was. Of course its possible that Sharena lying and there was another reason for Riley's gender switch that Sharena didn't want to reveal?
Author's Response: The reason for that is because this didn't start as a TG story, so I just inserted the "girl potion". In the original version, Riley was already female.
Date: 06/03/16 03:07 am Title: Interlude - The Dragon Hunter
Thanks for answering, so soon.
First, in Dragonheart, dragons use mimicry (color change), even when they are awake.
Second: "How to Train Your Dragon" has 2 movies, 2 special and 1 tv series. But only the first movie is good (wonderful and touching). The rest, not recommended.
Plot: A boy finds a dragon, and hides to avoid being killed. However, the father of the protagonist, is the most famous, kill dragons.
Third, Ranma ½ has many sagas, not included in the animated series.
Princess Dragon, is a saga of Ranma ½. One of the best sagas.
I hope these link functions
but if do not work. This images is the most important
Here, 2 images "Princess dragon"
I hope that the images, you will inspire or fun
Live in the US ?. I live in Bolivia, and I only have access to free pages.
Author's Response: Yeah, I live in the US. Also, I know the basic gist of How to Train Your Dragon, I've just not seen it myself.
Date: 06/02/16 05:27 pm Title: Interlude - The Dragon Hunter
History, very interesting,
I have a tendency to analyze the stories, which I like.
This story has a great similarity with the movie, "Dragonheart". With a small influence of the film, "How to Train Your Dragon". Taking place in a fictional world, like the 19th century, but mesclado with a world like "Lord of the Rings" (with city-states, towns, dragons and sorcerers)
In "AVATAR KORRA": cars, used electric motors (electronics is highly advanced, but the internal combustion engine and other sciences, are very underdeveloped)
Attention, Attention, Attention
Maybe, you do not know. but
Your story, it seems, the comic Ranma1 / 2. But not the story of the protagonist (story of Princess Dragon)
.A bit of history: story of Princess Dragon
Somewhere in China, there is a place called, Jusenkyo. Where there is a large number of water sources, with transformative properties. Most water sources, transform people in animals or mythical, or even prehistoric creatures.
However, there are two water sources, very special. A water sources, transform, to any person or animal in a teenage girl. The other spring tranforma any person or animal in man teen. But the water of the 2 springs, are neutralized, becoming an antidote.
Near Jusenkyo, there are two villages: the village of Amazons and the village of beast-men.
actually: there are marriages between 2 villages. Daughters live in the village of Amazons and sons live in the village of Bestia men.
But centuries ago; Men hunted animals and transformed into beautiful women (and forced marriage). They were born, lineages, tiger, wolf and dragon (royal family).
See chapter 24 x 1: story of Princess Dragon
Author's Response: While the similarities to Dragonheart and Legend of Korra were semi-intentional (Dragonheart was an inspiration for how the dragons are, and Korra's technology level is close to what my characters have, though that was more a happy accident then an outright intention), I've not seen How to Train Your Dragon or Ranma 1/2. I know of both, but I've seen neither.
The Mangafox links are useless to me, as Ranma is licensed in the US, and Mangafox dumps licensed manga. Not your fault, just their system.
So, yeah, the Ranma "references" are completely by accident. The only things I know about Ranma are that Ranma changes genders with water after falling into a spring and it's martial arts focused. I'm not trying to write the story of Princess Dragon at all. Riley's not even a princess. Special? Yes. Princess? No.
Thank you for the review, thank you for your points, I hope you continue to enjoy it as more chapters come.
Date: 05/14/16 11:26 pm Title: Chapter Six - The Beach
Okay... I've re-read it... So when ya gonna write another chapter?
Author's Response: I'm writing three now, a side chapter that should be done soon and two main chapters that will be done when they're done, but hopefully soon.
Date: 01/24/16 12:58 am Title: Chapter One - The Dragon
I got a bit confused during certain parts, especially the time period confused me like the other guy pointed out. I love it though.
Author's Response: The time period is meaningless. It's a fantasy story, and that means technological progression didn't happen for them like it did us.
Date: 10/30/15 08:52 pm Title: Chapter Four - The Thief
Interesting... but this story is confusing. How small was Riley in dragon form? Does this take place in a modern day society without guns? Much of Riley's perspective is confusing, since dragons don't exactly have opposable thumbs... bit more background would be much appreciated.
Author's Response: A) My dragons have thumbs.
B) Semi modern day. Think like Avatar: The Last Airbender/Legend of Korra. No cars, but trains.
C) Riley was about seven feet tall or so.
D) Anything else?