Date: 08/19/15 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 4 (Cocky Style)
If you update frequently, I am perfectly happy with the length of your chapters. It only sucks when someone posts a first chapter that is 200 words and then abandons the story.
That being said, for whatever reason I get the impression that the very small minority of readership that rates most stories values story length over story quality. Well forget the haters. I'm your fan!
Date: 08/18/15 01:34 pm Title: Chapter 3 (Cool Duels)
I considered writing a lengthy review, saying I'm sure I know how this will turn out. I read more chapters that went on and on as if trying to lead from what I thought would be obvious yet still good. Then dissipated.
Date: 08/16/15 08:55 am Title: Chapter 1 (Paper Please)
I'm interested to see where this goes. I would be careful with your tenses, though; I think there's a few mix ups between past and present. Also, maybe the introduction of the paper is a little too convenient, just lying on the bed. It might make more sense if it was something he found somewhere else and was holding on to, unable to come up with something until that moment, or something along those lines.
Looking forward to seeing what happens next.