Date: 02/06/17 04:51 am Title: Chapter 10: A New Life
I wasn't too sure on finishing this story, as the rape scenes really put me off of it, but overall the story was well thought out and made me appreciate the overall story of it. A very interesting and different direction for the keeper to take then in other stories.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the comment, and please let me assure both you and the rest of my readers that the "r*** scene" was not originally there in the first place. But as I was thinking of a way to end this story I just took a chance with it, and everything else fell into place. So as much as even I didn't really want to include it, I must say it did help me with the ending.
Date: 05/01/16 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 10: A New Life
This is the best magical story I have read on this site, hugely enjoyable. Everything, including the twist with evil Marty, is well thought out and well described. Thank you for a gripping and lovely read. Monika.
Author's Response: Thank you very much Monika! It makes me so very happy to hear that it was enjoyed as much as I enjoyed creating it, It's because of comments like yours that I was able to finish it in the first place.
Date: 02/06/16 10:23 pm Title: Chapter 5: Kimmy and College (Part Three)
Interesting turn of events. I am so glad that you did not just write a rape scene and let it go at that. This one was uncomfortable to read, wish it had been another Eric laced scene. Still, good so far.
Date: 01/21/16 03:50 am Title: Chapter 7: Sumiko's Birthday (Part Two - The Spa)
Awesome story. We gonna see chapter 11 anytime soon?
Author's Response: Thanks for the response, and yes, not only will you be able to see chapter 11 soon but I plan to finish the story as well. Ever since school started up i've been so busy, but I send out a huuuuuuge apology to anyone who is following this story and waiting for the conclusion, I assure you that it is priority number one on my list.
Date: 09/03/15 11:09 pm Title: Chapter 7: Sumiko's Birthday (Part One - Preparation)
Hmm was planning on following Jenn as the 2nd one was a little offputting for me, although i didnt think Beck new Ben but i guess Marty has something to do with that huh. Guess we'll see what option 3 is first before choosing!
Date: 09/01/15 07:08 am Title: Chapter 6: Marty the Doctor?
When did Kathy become Becky?
You've also got your "your" and "you're" mixed up.
Author's Response: Hi, just wanted to thank you so much for letting me know about my little mistakes, I try to triple read each chapter before I post it to make sure everything is fine, glad to see someone is nice enough to point out any mistakes. I have fixed them now, and if you find anything wrong in the future please let me know! Elphabathropp42
Date: 08/25/15 04:44 pm Title: Chapter 5: Kimmy and College (Part Two)
I wasn't expecting a lot when I first read the title and summary, but this story surprised me. You have very good writing ability, and you have a good sense of characterization. So far if I had to choose, I would rather choose Jenny's life over Kimmy's life were I in Marty's situation just because it seems more stable (The naughty sex doesn't hurt either), but Kimmy's friend sounds sweet and like a genuine friend. Ms Peters may just be using Jenny as a fuck toy for all we know.
Date: 08/16/15 05:16 pm Title: Chapter 4: The Morning After
This is some great stuff. Not enough stories like this these days. I enjoy light crisp writing style and the mental side of things. Always would like to have more bustiness but I am quite enjoying this! Please keep it up. - A
Date: 08/12/15 10:03 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Man Named Marty
I just wanted to take a minute to thank everyone for the wonderful reviews/comments. I can't tell you how much they mean to me, and trust me, I am working everyday to make this story the best I can. So just hang in there, and I promise to add new chapters as I can, it may take a few days, or even a week, but more is yet to come!