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Reviewer: DC1writes Signed Report
Date: 08/25/16 02:56 pm Title: Chapter 1

Understandable. Thanks anyway!

Reviewer: DC1writes Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/16 07:04 am Title: Chapter 1

Great story! Where are the others? Can't get enough...

Author's Response: My old stories aren't quite as polished as I'd like them to be. Rather than redistributing them as they currently are, I want to eventually reread them and proof them beforehand. I have a couple other things I want to do before I get around to doing that though so it will be a while.

Reviewer: ubougie Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/22/16 03:34 pm Title: Chapter 1

A downside to looking at your own writing is that it has the same effect as reading a story the second time. It has a lot less bite. It's the tragedy of authorship. I know for me anyway, I start writing when I run out of stuff to read online. The pro is I can write a story just how I want it (within my talent as an author anyway), while the con is that it is drawn out, so while I do enjoy writing twists and turns, it just is not as poignant to write it as it is to read something unexpectedly.

"I always feel silly when I try to write explicit sex." Ha! My first attempts were horrible. In real life I use technical terms for organs, even in sexy contexts. I'm not one for just throwing around words like "pussy" and "cock" willy nilly (though my gf loves it the few times I do). I also don't use pet names in real life, so after a few attempts which all sound forced, I just drop them, and rarely say "honey" or "sweety" or whatever pet names actually sound like. It is so out of my comfort zone. Just someone's actual name is good enough for me. Anyway, all that to say, this story about the monster girl, it is actually one of the sexiest drawn out sequences I've read. It annoys me when I read a story that spends all this time setting up the plot, and then within just a few sentences, they skip over the whole middle of the story and they're already fully at their final stage (in the case of tg stories, I'm referring to fully transformed mentally and physically / instant transformation). For me it is all about the tension, resistance, corruption, build up, and release. I still think I'm mediocre at it in some respects that I'm still trying to work on, but I'll admit in a non-modest way that when it comes to writing an overall story that moves very gradually, I've got that pretty well figured out.

To close off the subject of "explicit sex", I tend to include it in the story just because it gives it a sense of finality. But otherwise I prefer to use masturbation because I only have to deal with one person's wants and thoughts, and people are a lot more honest with themselves than they are with a partner, but can still be in denial which is fun too, because its another barrier to break (as with the monster girl in this story who is wonderfully in denial).

I PMed you my e-mail in case you want to keep in touch for whatever reason.

Reviewer: ubougie Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/22/16 10:22 am Title: Chapter 1

Returning the favor. How I missed this story when it came out, I don't know. I frankly love this story much more than my own writing, I have much to learn from you. My two favorite parts (which make up like more than half of the story) are when Drew talks about her obsession in such denial language, but you know just below the surface, there's already so much corruption. And of course, when the protagonist convinces her to go the last mile. Her enthusiasm and innocence and trust is both endearing and super hot. The only drawback in the story to my preferences, and this will sound like I'm somewhat still giving you a compliment, is that it is too short. Between the time when she sniffs the dick, and when he pushes her over the edge, I think there could have been a bit more teasing there. I would have liked to, for example, ask her what else she could think of that wouldn't turn her into a succubus, but that would help fill her curiosity, basically let her own imagination corrupt her further, each new thing grasping at straws to the point where you start asking "wait, isn't she already basically breaking the rules?" But man, is it ever palpable, every time she takes a step closer to the precipice, she is pulled towards it with even more force, like a magnet. Keep writing stories like this one would be my humble request, and I'll keep loving them. :)

Author's Response: Well, I like your story more than my own writing, too ;p. We're probably both just too critical of ourselves. As for the latter (sexy) half not being drawn out as much as you'd like, well, I don't usually write explicit stuff. This story was one of my very few attempts at it. I always feel silly when I try to write explicit sex. It is nice to hear you appreciated it though, next time I get explicit I'll try to delve a bit deeper.

Reviewer: Denkkar Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/27/15 11:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

Very nice buildup! This story flowed perfectly and was quite hot as well.

Reviewer: Rks Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/30/15 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 1

Very nice story. i've never heard of this universe before but seems quite nice, and most importantly you created a very nice scenario for that entry, writen in a very enjoyable way. It made me wonder even if I can find any more material writen by you somewhere else.
Nice job.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm planning on putting some other stories up here as well as porting some old ones over... eventually.

Reviewer: Skylar Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/24/15 08:29 am Title: Chapter 1

Its too short, much too short. =)

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