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Reviewer: Sanro Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/27/15 08:10 pm Title: Chapter 4: The big day

Oh wow its awesome 😍😘

Author's Response: Thanks you!

Reviewer: darwen98 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/09/15 08:06 pm Title: Chapter 3: Jackie Adams

liking this story a lot

Author's Response: Thanks you!

Reviewer: Sanro Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/04/15 04:19 pm Title: Chapter 2: Why the female body?

Very nice chapter 😍😘🙌

Author's Response: Thanks you!

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 07/04/15 08:54 am Title: Chapter 2: Why the female body?

Needs work...

Author's Response: Maybe, it depends on what Thora likes. ^^ But a supervillain doesn't need a work.

Reviewer: Sanro Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/02/15 04:55 pm Title: Chapter 1: The newborn villain

Its awesome keep it up 😍😘

Author's Response: Thanks you! I am soon finished.

Reviewer: Wizisi Signed starstar Report
Date: 07/02/15 08:55 am Title: Chapter 1: The newborn villain

The idea is workable, you've just gotta get past the numerous grammar errors. Proper set-up will help as well, you're mostly just explaining the character instead of letting a scene do that for you.

MOSTLY. Grammar.

I'll give you points for the idea, but if reading it is like riding down a gravel road on a skateboard then it's going to be difficult to read.

Author's Response: I know, but my English grammar and other language is not the best. Sorry.

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