Date: 08/05/15 11:57 pm Title: The Transformation and school
Okay, I'm trying to finish this editing up as fast as I can. Almost done, just gotta finish up the last of it.... And boy have I fallen behind, I'll try to do what I can, but it'll be a while before I get 'er done since I don't have any computer besides my phone... XD
Author's Response: jacks take your time be back on this soon chapter 17 will be coming soon
Date: 07/05/15 09:49 pm Title: Prologue
Okay, I'm going to have to rewrite chapter 4's transformation scene; so It may take a bit and just about all of the transformation will be completely redone.... And very different from how you have it...
Author's Response: I need her to stay blonde and blue eyes school scene must stay the same
Date: 06/25/15 09:20 pm Title: School and selection decision time
Interesting, this is gonna be interesting to work with... Part 1 is now edited, tell me what you think... XD
On a side note: I need to help you a little more, send me a note or comment on my DA Profile.... Gotta learn to do things a little better and on your own, but more on that when we talk later
Author's Response: ok I have been trying to fix it up as well slowley
Date: 06/23/15 03:19 pm Title: School and selection decision time
Interesting, but what do you say to me just adding this chapter into the previous chapter (part 1) and just making one while chapter...? Parts should be used for really lengthy works, (except comics & captions, as they generally have limited space for writing; Manga and the like are generally a little different in both regards); so what'd you say? (Just know I haven't finished editing the previous chapter due to constant headaches, the temperature and humidity here are rough on my sinuses... Southeastern U.S.A.)
Author's Response: I need to put in parts cause of my cliff hanger in chapter 2
Date: 06/21/15 06:45 pm Title: Home , School and selection
It's an interesting start you've got but things like grammar, punctuation and stuff like that need fixing quite a bit. I'd hold off on a rate for now
Author's Response: Yeah, that's where I come in... As I'll try to edit this some... darwen98 says he has learning disability, so I decided to give him a hand, as I have AS (undiagnosed) so I can emphasize a little....
Date: 06/21/15 06:20 pm Title: Prologue
Really love the concept behind this! I hope we get to see more as time passes. (After all it is one of the inspirations for my story).
Author's Response: Thank you and glad to be an inspiration for you! ~darwen98 & Jacks-O-Lance
Date: 06/20/15 01:16 am Title: Prologue
Well, I edited your part some; tell me how you like it.... But don't post the next part just yet, as there are a few things needing change: Length of story, The Summa..ry, and name of title to name a few.
Author's Response: Yes love it now thank you