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Reviewer: Musicat Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 09/17/17 01:59 pm Title: Boys Re-education and Training camp

Such a plot twist xD

Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 03/31/17 02:38 am Title: Jades Ex friends point of vew

Okay I guess

Reviewer: The Guy of the Internet Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/16/16 03:00 pm Title: Prologue

Well, Blimey, it gets right into it, but it's great!

Reviewer: Selvanius Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/12/15 02:57 am Title: Prologue

Wow I just started reading this story, but I can tell it's going to be good!

Author's Response: you will have to find out if you don't like it is ok

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 08/07/15 12:36 am Title: The Transformation and school

Okay, editing is done for ch 4... What'd ya think?

Author's Response: I love it so much better than it was before I'll use it on other chapters in this story

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 08/05/15 11:57 pm Title: The Transformation and school

Okay, I'm trying to finish this editing up as fast as I can. Almost done, just gotta finish up the last of it.... And boy have I fallen behind, I'll try to do what I can, but it'll be a while before I get 'er done since I don't have any computer besides my phone... XD

Author's Response: jacks take your time be back on this soon chapter 17 will be coming soon

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 07/05/15 09:49 pm Title: Prologue

Okay, I'm going to have to rewrite chapter 4's transformation scene; so It may take a bit and just about all of the transformation will be completely redone.... And very different from how you have it...

Author's Response: I need her to stay blonde and blue eyes school scene must stay the same

Reviewer: darwen98 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/03/15 11:57 am Title: The Transformation and school

Love the changes jacks

Author's Response: Not done yet....

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 06/26/15 11:57 pm Title: School and selection decision time

Okay, editing is done now.... What'd you think?

Author's Response: thank you I will try be better on chapter 4

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 06/25/15 09:20 pm Title: School and selection decision time

Interesting, this is gonna be interesting to work with... Part 1 is now edited, tell me what you think... XD

On a side note: I need to help you a little more, send me a note or comment on my DA Profile.... Gotta learn to do things a little better and on your own, but more on that when we talk later

Author's Response: ok I have been trying to fix it up as well slowley

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/24/15 09:49 am Title: School and selection decision time

Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks, but wait till I get a hold of it some more; as it'll be even better than it is now... ~ Jacks (editor)

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 06/23/15 03:19 pm Title: School and selection decision time

Interesting, but what do you say to me just adding this chapter into the previous chapter (part 1) and just making one while chapter...? Parts should be used for really lengthy works, (except comics & captions, as they generally have limited space for writing; Manga and the like are generally a little different in both regards); so what'd you say? (Just know I haven't finished editing the previous chapter due to constant headaches, the temperature and humidity here are rough on my sinuses... Southeastern U.S.A.)

Author's Response: I need to put in parts cause of my cliff hanger in chapter 2

Reviewer: Towny365 Signed Report
Date: 06/21/15 06:45 pm Title: Home , School and selection

It's an interesting start you've got but things like grammar, punctuation and stuff like that need fixing quite a bit. I'd hold off on a rate for now

Author's Response: Yeah, that's where I come in... As I'll try to edit this some... darwen98 says he has learning disability, so I decided to give him a hand, as I have AS (undiagnosed) so I can emphasize a little....

Reviewer: Cassius_Mayfair Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/21/15 06:20 pm Title: Prologue

Really love the concept behind this! I hope we get to see more as time passes. (After all it is one of the inspirations for my story).

Author's Response: Thank you and glad to be an inspiration for you! ~darwen98 & Jacks-O-Lance

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/21/15 03:04 pm Title: Home , School and selection

Interesting start,looking forward for the next chapters!

Author's Response: Thanks you.... XD ~ Jacks & darwen98

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 06/21/15 12:02 pm Title: Home , School and selection

Hmmm..... Well I'm definitely gonna have to tweak this a bit, so I'll get started on editing when I get the chance..... XD

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 06/20/15 01:16 am Title: Prologue

Well, I edited your part some; tell me how you like it.... But don't post the next part just yet, as there are a few things needing change: Length of story, The Summa..ry, and name of title to name a few.

Author's Response: Yes love it now thank you

Reviewer: Jacks-O-Lance Signed Report
Date: 06/19/15 11:43 pm Title: Prologue

Still needs some work, so I'll copy and paste it in my notes on my phone then do some editing to it and we shall go from there...!

Author's Response: thank you will wait till you have done your changes to start chapter 2

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