Date: 12/11/18 09:38 pm Title: "Sisterhood"
I adore this story and while most of it is wonderful fun wild fiction, this chapter, ;sisterhood' was really powerful for me as it resonated with lots of experiences I've had of coming out to partners as trans, while in bed with them. it's always related to sex as (and I hope this isn't too personal to say) however much I've tried my lovemaking is never in anyway how a male is expected to behave and one way or another my behaviour kind of outs me. I don't know if this is a direction you intended for it but it the sudden transformation and lily's inability to pretend she isn't a girl really resonated with me as a metaphor for that experience.
I hope you continue with the story as it's ace.
Date: 07/05/16 02:09 am Title: "Introduction"
I've spent the past couple of weeknight and I'm really loving the story so far. Let's all hope Lara isn't working for the FDO ;3. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much!!!! I'm glad you're enjoying it!!! Keep checking back, I'll have new chapters out soon!!! :)
Date: 06/21/16 09:54 pm Title: “Adjustment Issues”
Nice! Chapter 15 was up until this point my favorite, so I was happy to see it come back around to her orientation and attraction to guys. It isn't just the topic, but also how you go about writing about it, it is very well executed.
Date: 03/16/16 02:54 am Title: “The Beginning Of The End”
In my eye this pretty much confirms his head of the actual project and he is somehow controlling them from behind the scenes. Although how he has Lily's case and why Johnson is actually gunning for her who knows
Author's Response: I'll leave you to your thoughts, I'm not going to give anything away at this stage! ;) Thanks for the comment!
Date: 03/15/16 07:18 pm Title: "Introduction"
Really enjoying the story and looking forward to seeing where you go with it!
Couple of things I wonder about (and maybe you've already had someone ask this, and answered it, I'll admit I didn't go through all the reviews:
Why did the FDO, given their nanobots already mindfuck the victims, not have said nanobots cause their converts to be lesbians? It seems odd that an organisation dedicated to entirely erasing the male gender would want its ranks filled with girls who are boycrazy even while hating boys.
Why is Harry/Lily a heterosexual girl? Given she was apparently at least somewhat transgendered all along, yet very clearly was only attracted to girls, why is it that when her gender was changed, she was suddenly attracted to men even though her mind was untouched?
Maybe I'm just reading too much into things/expecting more than I should, and it's not like it's ruining my enjoyment of the story or anything, just something I'm curious about.
Author's Response: Yeah, it has already been brought up before. It's a mistake on my part. I originally intended for it to be just another obstacle for Harry/Lily to face, and I was going to claim it was another side effect of the lightning bolt. But one thing lead to another, and I realised it was too late to go back and change the mistake so it just sorta stuck and I had to elaborate on it!!! Thanks for the review, I appreciate it and hope you keep on enjoying the story!
Date: 01/30/16 11:15 pm Title: "A Pair Of My Own"
Well-designed and described metamorphosis. He knows it's coming, so he's very aware of the different parts of him and what's actually happening, especially in the genitalia. I enjoyed this transformation thoroughly, one of the best that I've read. Very well done. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind words! It means a lot! The initial transformation was something that I'd spent a lot of time thinking about, knowing that - as a TG story - it's one of, if not THE most important things in the narrative. I do have another in-depth transformation on the way that I hope will be better than this one, so keep your eyes open for the update!
Date: 01/06/16 01:00 pm Title: “Filling The Ranks”
I usually avoid stories of this premise like the plague since they're usually just a bunch of man hating, which irritates me to no end.
But I was looking for something new to read and nothing was grabbing my interest. I then noticed the number of reviews yours and After reading a few I decided to give it a chance and wasn't disappointed.
It's very well written. The MC feels like an actual person. I still don't like some aspects but I've been spending most of the day reading it all since it's just that good.
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks very much! I'm glad you're enjoying it!!! :D :D
Date: 01/06/16 01:53 am Title: “Filling The Ranks”
Yay! I was beginning to wonder when the next update would come and here it is! Can't wait to see how everything goes in the battle to keep the male gender from going extinct. Oh yeah. The F.D.O are a little short sighted in one area... They plan to get rid of all males but all the males and females injected with the nanobots appear to be attracted to men..... Wouldn't it make more sense to make them attracted to females instead as part of the "conditioning". Just something I have been thinking about. Not that I am complaining...
Anyway, thank you for the chapter!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks for commenting!!! I know that the attraction thing is an issue, someone else brought it up before. It's a mistake on my part because I wanted another problem for Harry once he became Lily. Not only does he become female, he - or should I say 'she' - then begins to find men attractive. I intended to retcon it by claiming it was another effect of the lightning strike or by saying that he'd always had a repressed desire to be a girl/attraction to men, but one thing led to another and I sort of forgot about it... my bad!!! Haha!
Date: 12/16/15 03:45 am Title: “Coming Clean”
Yay! A new chapter! This was definitely worth checking recent updates before going to bed. A couple weeks ago I discovered this story and haven't been able to get it out of the back of my mind ever since. I can't wait to see what is next! Thank you for the chapter!
Date: 11/09/15 10:48 am Title: “Congratulations! It’s A Girl”
oooowww geeeez confesion to mom harsh... well in the least lily came out im happy to see the story inching along cant wait to see "harry" reunite with lara if not bf & gf maybe they can just be friends anyway happy to see u post cant wait for ur next post^^
Date: 10/23/15 07:11 am Title: "Introduction"
Another great chapter. Thanks for your story on a whole. I hope you will lead it to completion; I really grew attached to the characters.
Eagerly waiting for the next chapter,
Author's Response: I'm definitely going to finish it!!!! It's still a work-in-progress! Thanks for the kind words!!! :)
Date: 10/19/15 07:04 pm Title: "Introduction"
What is the purpose of engineering them all to be heterosexual, in a world where they intend to have only women? These mad scientist people aren't too smart are they?
Author's Response: Shhh... plot holes. ;) I'm just kidding. I acknowledge the fact it doesn't make complete sense, it was needed for the certain parts of the protagonist's development.
Date: 10/01/15 11:39 pm Title: "On The Devil's Doorstep"
*whistles* now thats action packed, and like every story villain that snake of a woman Johnson escaped. cant wait for next chapter!
Author's Response: Hope you enjoyed!!! Villains have that pesky tendency to escape don't they??? :D
Date: 09/26/15 12:54 am Title: "Apply Pressure Here"
Short chapter guess at least they failed in a way. Some more are gonna turn thanks to that operation
Author's Response: Yeah, sorry it's short. It there more as a plot-enriching tool than anything else. :) Thanks for the feedback!
Date: 08/09/15 11:01 am Title: "Where No Man Has Gone Before"
Marvellous, I love this story. It is incredible how the feelings and the fighting or the reality are described. Thank you for this story. I wait for every chapters with impatience.
Author's Response: Wow!!! Thank you for such a positive response! :D
Date: 08/08/15 10:29 pm Title: "Where No Man Has Gone Before"
very enjoyable do you ever think her nano in her mind might start working
Author's Response: Thank you! I have no plans for the nanobots to take over Lily's mind for now, I've got something slightly different up my sleeve. Who knows what the future may hold? :D
Date: 06/29/15 11:04 pm Title: "Introduction"
@ColbatTungsten & GreenLeaf: darwen98 was unaware of this till it pointed out and that he had his cousin make it better; I as proofreader/editor of said story has told him to send me a copy of it and then delete it from here.... So I'll edit to the fullest extent I can where there's no Cory"unintended copyright infringement taking place... You have our sincerest apologies for this unintended incident... ~ Jacks-O-Lance & darwen98
Date: 06/29/15 05:35 pm Title: "Introduction"
I know this isn't really a rating, but I thought you should know that your transformation was stolen by the story 'The future has changed now women rule'. The transformation is in Ch. 4, and is literally a copy/paste of your work.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for letting me know!!!
Date: 06/05/15 07:03 pm Title: "Introduction"
What's wrong? You don't seem to have posted anything for a while... Don't give this story up, many enjoyed reading it! Not to mention that you let us on a cliffhanger...
Author's Response: Sorry, my friend. I'm in the middle of my A-Level examinations! I shall get back to posting more regularly when they are over. :)
Date: 06/01/15 08:18 am Title: "Introduction"
Very much enjoying this... The real question is whether or not you're going to update soon. :)
Author's Response: I am still working on it! I'm currently in the middle of my exams, but I will definitely get back to it once they're done!
Date: 05/15/15 03:29 pm Title: "Introduction"
Dang just read one of the comments and I noticed the tag attracted to men. Which was pretty surprising news to me too. I was hoping a lesbian happier ending. Sad. Still. Gonna continue reading for now.
Here's to hoping for a change. :) no matter how small the chance may be.
Author's Response: Don't worry! I have a few ideas flying around inside my head! :D You'll have to wait and see!
Date: 05/09/15 03:35 am Title: "Introduction"
There is one thing I noticed in the story description above. The 'orientation' says she becomes only attracted to men. Kind of cruel in a world that won't have any men left for much longer. I just thought I'd point that out.
Fun story so far.