Date: 12/03/19 04:11 pm Title: The Creek
A little edit: After a proposition, use the object pronoun. I saw quite a few "between x and I" when it should be "between x and me."
Aside from that, interesting story. Hopefully the main character can increase her height and cup size somehow. At least I like a tall busty girl like Stephanie Fox
Date: 12/02/19 10:57 pm Title: A Perfect Plan
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Can I adopt the original version and add content to it? I'd run my ideas by you first (via e-mail) so we don't overlap. If not, that's cool.
Author's Response: I'd say feel free to make spin-offs if you want in the same universe, like someone else finds a machine, but to please leave the old story and its content/characters alone. I'd be happy to email you all the secrets of the machine for continuity between our stories if you wish too! Cheers!
Date: 12/02/19 09:57 pm Title: A Perfect Plan
I preferred the original version. It had a more organic, fun feeling. I'm sorry to see it go. :-(
Author's Response: I'm sorry you feel that way. I've posted the old content up as a separate story if you or anyone else wants to read it again, but no more updates will be made to it.
Date: 11/29/19 07:52 pm Title: Preemptive Strike
It's the end of the week or will be soon (if you count Saturday/the weekend). I do hope you add that promised first new chapter. If you add more than one that would be even sweeter. *crosses fingers*
BTW This is my favorite chapter of your story, so far. Jack's transformation to Joyce is great, very well done.
Author's Response: Probably gonna be coming out late tomorrow (don't know your timezone or anything, but i'm juts gonna ballpark ~30hrs from now), and although a lot has changed the majority is still the same. And thanks! Glad to hear it! I've got a few more transformations lined up for the next few chapters. Things are about to change!
Date: 11/28/19 08:10 pm Title: Activation
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Will you follow all the categories you've previously selected? Some of them such as "incest", "model", and "becomes only attracted to men" have me fascinated by what the future may hold for Jack.
Author's Response: All in due time. Lets just say this whole story is getting a big Revamp (Of course pun intended). But yeah, All the main categories of the story will be met in due time. I have a rough story line written out for the plot, but then again there's always room to add something else in. Really depends on what everyone else wants to see. I hope that once I start uploading the new chapters I might be able to get some insight into the parts the people want to see more of as people start to read it again!
Date: 11/28/19 04:54 pm Title: The Creek
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I hope you do update soon (rather than disappear again). No offense, but I do want to know what happens next.
Author's Response: I've already started entering edits to some chapters. Once everything is all fine tuned, ill post the beginning of the new chapters by the end of the week! Cheers!
Date: 09/26/19 06:57 pm Title: Initiation
Where did you go? I thought there were going to be new updates?
Author's Response: Sorry, to be honest I started writing a bunch, never entered it in to the site, and then forgot about it. By the end of the week though, this story will be revived. That's a promise!
Date: 10/15/15 06:22 pm Title: Initiation
I agree with the last reviewer too short. I do however wonder how the machine works exactly? Is it trigger by whatever Jack is thinking about at a give time? Other than the perception/reality bending bracelet (he created so everyone thinks he was always a girl) he hasn't seemed to control what the items do, yet any way.
As for what I'd like to see next I still think you mentioned Maria's book for a reason and Joyce will soon get a masculine make over becoming a buff ninja. That is where I think it is going short term. Long term I'll be interested to see if Maria or Ryan end up being ending game for Jack or Joyce.
Date: 03/22/15 03:21 am Title: Preemptive Strike
Just wanted to review this chapter to say the transformation is excellent for the most part -- enough that I'll give it 5 stars overall.
Just a couple minor criticisms: Jake wouldn't necessarily know the cup sizes of her breasts during the transformation, and probably wouldn't know the 5'7" height, either (although, of course, she could estimate). The clothing transformation might stand to be a little more detailed, and it comes across as being in the "wrong order" here, that is, Jake would have tried the boxers and the muscle shirt first, then probably the shirt and track pants. And there's a crucial typo -- I'm assuming the measurements should be 36-28-32, perhaps? With the measurements as listed, Jake would be quite "round" (and likely wouldn't be wearing skinny jeans).
At any rate, I'm hoping for more transformations along these lines as the story continues.
Author's Response: All taken into account. They will be fixed shortly. Thanks! :D