Date: 05/16/15 10:40 am Title: First taste
This was the first story i read after stumbling on this wonderful site. I totally enjoyed it and have re-read several times.
I'm not a writer so have no constructive criticism, I just want to thank you for sharing a part of yourself with me.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks! It always makes my day when somebody likes my work.
Date: 10/12/13 08:26 pm Title: First taste
You have quite an imagination, I just read two of your stories in a sitting, and I feel like I've just got off a roller coaster. Beautifully written work, thankyou for sharing it with us. X
Author's Response: Don't overdose! Take them slowly! I need my ego strokes spread out over more time, you see.
Date: 01/15/12 03:03 pm Title: First taste
I'd love to see a continuation of this story, showing further consequences and after-effects during their later lives.
Author's Response: I honestly can't think of a reasonable story arc. But we'll see if the Muse decides whether there is one. I like these characters and it does seem sad to leave them bereft of our attention.
Date: 06/18/11 03:54 pm Title: Happily ever after
Really well written story. Your dialogue rings true, especially where Mark and Alec are talking together. Interesting way of handling the swap although I would like an explanation of why Rachel & Mark were so linked but none of the other swappees had the same connection. all in all an enjoyable read, badump!
Author's Response: Oh, that's simple: Alec thought through the consequences of deeper entanglement and by the time Mark swapped with Jessica (remember how no sedation was needed already?) there was no such side effect - but remember: Jessica thought Rachel was really attractive but didn't know why, she dumped Eddie after seeing that he wasn't so good for her, and I think in general she got a little better adjusted. We don't see Becky later in the story, but I had imagined her getting a lot smarter from her swap with Alec. So there was no permanent entanglement like the first trial run, but there was still some spillover. None of that appears in the story because Mark simply didn't think about it. In his defense, he had a lot going on in his life. I'm certain that in her later life, Mark asked Alec, and he said something like whargle bing-a doodle and she laughed and jumped his bones and a fine night was had by all concerned. Meanwhile, up in our much more boring plane of reality, the author didn't explore all those ramifications because the idea was to hold the word count *down*, not pump it up, and to get a story finished so said author could get back to the paying work. In which goal I think the author succeeded admirably! (For once.)