Date: 10/15/18 01:18 am Title: Twenty Years Gone
The sentence-level writing is quite good, and I like your characterization of Jess/April. But the ending is completely unsatisfying; not only does it end in a teaser for the sequel (which is fine), but it doesn't resolve the core question of the story as a whole -- what happened between Jess's transition and the five years later chapters? What did Ashley do and why is April mad at her? That should have been resolved in this story, not put off to an eventual sequel.
Date: 02/02/15 03:11 pm Title: Prologue
in this story and Life Changes, I like the way that the change is common enough for the protagonist to have role models and friends that have been through it. I look forward to them coming to enjoy the lives they've chosen.
But I am a little confused... it's like parts 3 and 5 are a different story than parts 1, 2, and 4. Is April the same person as Jessica? Who's Chloe? And is the Drew in part 5 the same person as Drew in part 2?
Date: 02/01/15 06:34 pm Title: Prologue
Great to have you back! Sad you didn't finish your others but I know how that goes. Looking forward to where you go with this. - A
Author's Response: Thank you! I intend to get back to Life Changes at some point. It will be worth the wait. :)
Date: 01/31/15 04:02 am Title: Prologue
Enjoying this, but holding off on a rated review for now. Chapter three was very short, confusing, and there is already a five year skip? I'm not really sure what is going on there.
Author's Response: There seemed to have been an issue with chapter three. It is longer than that! Thank you for noticing!