Date: 08/23/15 10:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hi! I was wondering if you were going to continue this story? I was really hoping you would!
Writing can be hard and lonely, and I just wanted to share some support with you! I like your story telling style, and would love to see more!
Date: 01/26/15 11:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Actually using a real military camp was a nice touch. (Yes, I am the support of person who looks up everything.) From my understanding, your portrayal of what Marines stationed in Afghanistan actually do is spot on too.
I am not a military buff or anything, but I enjoy reading work that clearly was given quite a bit of thought.
Date: 01/26/15 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really really liked this! It punched all my buttons right away - i can't wait to read more. I really like the 'stranger in a strange land' kind of story - but I wonder if you had Stark accept his circumstances too easily... Do you think he'd be more "NOPE this isn't happening - I'm being drugged!" or is he kind of putting off his meltdown until he knows he's not in enemy territory... cause it does kind of feel a meltdown (even if minor) is coming. He just suffered a HUGE change in his world view - not only is his gender and maybe age different, his world and all the geopolitics are different too. He'd feel lost and alone, probably except for his sisters who know about earth. Really cool - I can't wait to see more.
Author's Response: Not to spoil anything, but I'm toying with the idea of a meltdown later on, I'm surprised you caught on. Thank you for the feedback, helps a lot.
Date: 01/26/15 11:35 am Title: Chapter 1
Excellent story. I am impressed at how accurate and realistic the military parts are, too. Were you in the military or know someone in the military?
Also, I love it when people post things without typos. It happens rather rarely, even including news stories and published books.
Author's Response: Personally, I've not been in the military nor have someone with in-depth knowledge on the subject, but I usually find characters with military or service backgrounds such as the police easy to portray, as my dad is a police sergeant. Thanks for the feedback, though!