Reviews For A spell For my X
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Reviewer: trollermctroll Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/29/15 04:11 am Title: Starts with a spell

Love the story, please add more to the story.

Reviewer: JollyGiant Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/16/14 06:10 am Title: Starts with a spell

I really like it so far. In my opinion I hope you go down a bimbo road here, but thats up to you the author

Reviewer: daelon Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/13/14 03:22 am Title: Starts with a spell

This is a great start. The transformation is well described and well paced. I look forward to seeing where things go.

As a note for improvement, I suggest starting a new paragraph each time a different person speaks. It makes it easier to follow conversations and who's saying what.

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/12/14 10:13 am Title: Starts with a spell

Excellent start,a awesome change sequence! I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Reviewer: The Wedge Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/12/14 03:55 am Title: Starts with a spell

Do continue!

As a writing note, add an extra space between paragraphs helps. Noticed a few words that where misspelled as well. Try to use a spell check if you can.

Author's Response: ok thanks :) ill try and bring you another chapter ^.^ (with less spelling mistakes) thanks for the advice

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