Date: 03/18/19 11:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Though well written I give this only two stars for it's extremely unsatisfying effect on account of there being no more story to come. Were it the first chapter of a larger story it would enthusiastically be given a of score five stars.
Date: 03/05/16 11:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very interesting story. I like what you have written. It is short and effective. Leaves the reader wanting more. I dont like stories where stuff like this happens to people. But in this case he still appears to have some control, still has his mind and one can hope he finds his way back.
I'm not sure I understand how the crowds and his friends just forget all about him. It may have been better if he were alone. One less thing to deal with. With short stories like this, it may be better to leave no loose ends except maybe the key story arc.
Date: 12/07/14 11:13 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm speechless. Wonderful, wonderful beginning. I'm so envious of both your character for what he/she will experience next, and of you for your excellent storytelling. Please don't keep us waiting forever for more of this.
Author's Response: Hi Casey, thanks for the praise! I was tempted to continue the story, to answer some of the questions raised; why was the narrator chosen to be transformed? What did he (she?) do next? What happens when he tracks down his friends again? However, I think I prefer to both read and write short standalone pieces, so you'll probably see something completely different from me next. You'll just have to fill in the blanks in this story yourself!
Date: 12/06/14 05:39 am Title: Chapter 1
Brilliant. Change was very original. The bit with the mirror confused me though. What was that about?
Author's Response: Hi TmC, thanks for the feedback. I've now rewritten and slightly extended that segment. Hope it's easier to follow now!