Date: 10/28/14 02:26 am Title: Gear 1 - The Silver Tick
Not bad, you would benefit from taking more time to describe the world. Other than that, you just have a couple grammatical and spelling mistakes.I would like to see more.
Author's Response: When I wrought it I thought there was more in it then I put in, I wright all my story's on a 3ds you see so it can make it hard sometimes, but thanks for the feed back. :)