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Reviewer: ubougie Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 06/18/16 06:09 pm Title: Chapter 2 More surprizes

Nice setup, looking forward to more. Congrats on your newborn.

Author's Response: Thank you I've a pretty good idea where this story is heading. Although at times a couple of the characters seem to take it in another direction. Thank you for that too he's pretty demanding but he's a joy as well Cheryl x

Reviewer: Maryjane Signed Report
Date: 02/09/16 01:36 pm Title: Chapter 1

I like it Cheryl, can't wait for next installment,keep them coming.

Reviewer: Darkseide Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 11/14/14 01:51 am Title: Chapter 1

Would love to read more of this

Reviewer: A_Kent Signed Report
Date: 10/21/14 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

If you want some help with editing, send it my way. I'd be happy to help.

Author's Response: Thanks that would be very helpful. What would be the best way of sending it?

Reviewer: happyboy Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/14/14 04:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

Start of a good enjoyable story hope the next chapters are up to this standard

Author's Response: Thank you I'm about half way through the next chapter now it will probably be a little shorter than the first but have to see how it goes,

Reviewer: Kazumy Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/14 09:33 pm Title: Chapter 1

ohh curious story, making me wonder what's going to happen next ??

Author's Response: Thank you I have a few ideas but sometimes even I am surprized at where the story goes.

Reviewer: A_Kent Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/14 07:11 pm Title: Chapter 1

Interesting start, I like how you have added in the politics, don't see that very often in these stories.
Work on the spacing a bit more, you want a space after every paragraph, it makes it easier to read, especially on smaller screens.
Also edit it a little more closely, there were some mistakes that are fairly easy to see, like "Frogs and spice and all things nice are what little girls are made of-"
I can't wait to see the next chapter.
Cheers

Author's Response: In my way of thinking politics always has to added in a story such as this. I think people tend to avoid it or have a fear of raising it which is a pity. Thanks Kent I'll do that next time I never thought about the smaller screen situation. I know I could have kicked myself at the amount of stupid things I'd missed. My dyslexic problems center mainly around grammar, punctuation and organazation. I went through it so many times I think what I'll do next time is leave it a few days then go back to it. Cheryl

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