Date: 10/28/14 06:43 pm Title: Aliens
Oh no,say it isn't so! Well done,awesome chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review man :) I actually have two endings which I haven't decided upon yet, thinking of doing both but maybe just one we'll see. What do you reckon?
Date: 10/06/14 10:28 pm Title: Chapter 4
It's a good story. There are a few issues though. Your word tenses could use a little more work. Here for example " Straight away we was off to avoid detection of the guard"
Also there are just a few spelling errors and missing words. But that's nothing a proper proof read can't fix.
But other than that it's a bit rushed in places. One minute they're in one place the next there in another without an adequate explanation of how they got there.
Right, I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this.
Author's Response: Yeah i see what you mean. I did two copies of the recent chapters but the re done improved versions deleted and I just wanted to get them up so I fixed some major problems and I had to leave some bits out sorry. But I will try and fix that :)
Date: 09/29/14 12:05 am Title: Intro
What do you mean by, I am currently seventeen, which makes me nine when it all happened? Maybe if you clarified this in the story it would make sense and also a predetermined date as to when this happened in the story.
Author's Response: It means he is 17 now but when the gender cycle first started he was 9