Date: 09/26/14 09:16 am Title: Bus ride
Interesting story. I thought wouldn't it be interesting if Chris/Meagan now had to help Savannah and Zoe turn another boy into their sister.
Author's Response: Ya know, that's a pretty good idea. I'll have to add that in when i can edit it. Thanks for the review!
Date: 09/26/14 01:48 am Title: Bus ride
A nicely written short story. It's sweet and full of enjoyment. I'll give you the advice I got when I first started on here, break the paragraphs up into more easily readable sentences. I usually do 3-4 lines then a white space. It just makes it easier to read. Anyway always nice to see new authors on here, liked your story, i give it a 4 because I prefer older characters and heard many stories like this before. But still a good short tale, keep writing and I look forward to reading more soon. x
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Sorry it was a bit odd with the placement. I was writing this on my tablet at night lol.