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Reviewer: Natasa Jessica Signed Report
Date: 08/26/14 12:27 am Title: Chapter 2

Just take my advise and make each chapter longer. :D

Reviewer: Natasa Jessica Signed Report
Date: 08/26/14 12:24 am Title: Chapter 1

the story is a bit to fast. The chapter was really short. needs paragraphs. But otherwise, its not that bad of a story. Try to make each chapter at least 1000 + words.

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed Report
Date: 08/24/14 09:22 pm Title: Chapter 2

Very cute start!

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