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Reviewer: A_Kent Signed Report
Date: 08/17/14 09:48 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ok, that makes more sense. In that case I'd recommend explaining it a little more, even a thousand words would have cleared it up.

Author's Response: Glad I could explain it, and I'm throwing a little something in to clarify now.

Reviewer: ElizabethJ Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/17/14 09:36 am Title: Chapter 1

I agree with A_Kent, regardlesss this story was very fun to read, i just wish the main character would have had sex with him at some point, also i don't understand why she gave away all her powers that seems more idiotic than you can be.

Author's Response: *Clears throat* Bimbo? Remember? No, I understand. The witch just took away a little too much intelligence from herself. I was tempted to write a direct encounter with Franklin and Yvonne, but I suck at writing s*x scenes. It just comes out all poor and I end up hating it.

Reviewer: A_Kent Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 08/17/14 05:49 am Title: Chapter 1

I like the first three quarters of this, but the ending is confusing. What exactly is going on with the government declaring bimbos as pets? Why does the witch allow herself to be a bimbo?
If it had left off at her staying as a bimbo it would be a good story, the ending makes it a bit of a mind screw. Sorry.

Author's Response: It was supposed to. Reality changed at the end, and the witch had grown to like Yvonne, so did her a favor thinking she could turn back. She was sadly mistaken. Sorry you didn't like the ending, though.

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