Date: 11/03/14 06:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Fuck yeah. Looking great so far and I'm loving your prose. Plus the fact that she didn't start masturbating in the shower and immediately go clothes shopping already makes it better than most of the stories on this site.
Only thing I'd like more of is descriptions of Troy. I don't really know what she looks like besides "beautiful." And don't you dare give me that old "but I wanna be vague so the audience can use their imagination" cop out.
Date: 07/24/14 09:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
This has the making of a good story it is a pity the author cannot finish and print a story in one go as it could be months before the next chapter is issued
Author's Response: Today's your lucky day, there's another chapter been submitted, and will soon be available for your reading pleasure. In the mean time you can check out my other stories, while Bound to Happen Sometime, and Back to the FutHER, are in a similar state of non completion, they are far closer to the end than the beginning. They're similar in execution to this story, and I'd be honoured if you could give them as positive a review as you have here. Thanks, James