Date: 09/08/14 10:23 pm Title: Chapter 5: The Bra 'N Panty Queen
You got the perfect feeling for the transformation in this last chapter but it was at pretty much breakneck spped suddenly. One moment he is noticing his butt is bigger then Bam! he's sucking a guy then bam hes fucking them and then we suddenly leave him. No filled out descriptions no denuine struggle, it good to see that internally he realized what was happened but even before he put up a fight/resisted he was suddenly done and over with on to the next person. Great concept overall and almost a well done execution, just the pacing needs work in my opinion.
Author's Response: Yeah I'm not happy with it either. I will edit it before working on the next chapter
Date: 08/13/14 06:19 pm Title: Introduction
The only advice/opinion I can give is try not to make Hugo completely forget who he was, when that happens it kinda stops being a TG story and is just a vanilla sex romp.
Author's Response: He will remember who he is or rather was but he won't be able to control himself and would essentially become a prisoner in his own body
Date: 08/13/14 10:32 am Title: Introduction
It's a great story but still has some room for more to it.
Author's Response: The plan is that after Hugo is changed, garmentia will move onto someone else plus the next chapter will have backstory on the town and garmentia
Date: 07/21/14 03:39 pm Title: Introduction
Looks good. I hope it just gets finished. Too many of the good magic transformation stories on this site go unfinished yet the terrible ones get like 30 chapters+
Author's Response: It will get finished but there will be no new chapter until next week
Date: 07/21/14 02:39 pm Title: The Bra 'N Panty King
Interesting start. short though so ill be interesting in reading more
Author's Response: I will probably edit the chapters a bit due to the fact that on a fresh look at it I've found out some things are missing or lack detailed description eg the new girl and Hugo