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Reviewer: Person42 Signed Report
Date: 07/14/14 06:21 am Title: Yes

Again, very rushed. Aside from that, good story so far.

Reviewer: magisterb Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/13/14 10:58 pm Title: Yes

I really enjoyed the story, but I think that you need a transition between the penultimate paragraph and the last paragraph of the most recent chapter. Suddenly we read "Positive." I wasn't sure whether she was having a dream. By all means, do add some transitional material. For example, did she go to a pharmacy and buy a urine kit? What were her thoughts? How did she feel when she sat down on the toilet and peed on it? I am looking forward to the continuation of the story.

Reviewer: diaperdd Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/13/14 12:02 pm Title: Yes

Wow what a crazy and enjoyable story. And to think all he wanted to do was find out the perfect gift for his girlfriend and now he's pregnant. Can't wait to read more

Reviewer: happyboy Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/11/14 09:52 pm Title: Confusion

Pity it is only part. Finishedlook forward to the end

Reviewer: happyboy Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/11/14 09:42 pm Title: Caught

Getting to be a good story hope the other chapter are as good

Reviewer: Person42 Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/11/14 05:11 am Title: Confusion

Other than it being a bit short, it's pretty nice. It's rushed, though. Very rushed. If you slowed down your writing, say describe her feelings more in-depth, it would be longer and a bit better. As is, it's nice.

Reviewer: diaperdd Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/11/14 03:57 am Title: Confusion

Fun read. Pretty interesting watching her go through all these changes and try to cope with them

Reviewer: diaperdd Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/10/14 04:12 am Title: New Everything

Wonder if he regrets his decision yet :). Should be interesting to see how she recovers

Reviewer: diaperdd Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/09/14 10:31 am Title: Caught

i agree with other reviewer, not a 1 star story. i like where its going and should be a fun ride. keep it going

Reviewer: JoeForest Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/09/14 07:15 am Title: Caught

Not sure why it's been rated one star - this looks promising!

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