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Reviewer: Selvanius Signed star Report
Date: 03/19/16 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 1

I'm trembling... Oh god... this is too hard... It's just so... GOD DAMN FUNNY!! Seriously, what the hell were you thinking?! I'm going to be completely honest. This looks like a kid from elementary school found out how to get on pornhub and then proceeded to describe a dick. No, a "REALLY REALLY REALLY" thick one. Holy crap I'm dying. It's too much!

Stay in school.

Reviewer: Gene Signed star Report
Date: 06/23/14 06:23 am Title: Chapter 1

Some people are good at certain things. Me, I'm an above-average hockey player. But I utterly suck at swimming. Literally, I can't swim. So I simply stay out of the pool.

Now for you. You have got some talent, in some area. Everyone does. Just...writing stories or even coherent sentences is not the thing you excel at. In fact, like me in water deeper than 6', you absolutely sink to the bottom.

So please, either take some classes on creative writing or stay out of the pool.

Gene

Reviewer: Valentine Signed star Report
Date: 06/23/14 05:41 am Title: Chapter 1

You need to go read a book.
Now try to make your stories look like they do in a book.

Reviewer: Natasa Jessica Signed star Report
Date: 06/23/14 12:00 am Title: Chapter 1

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