Date: 06/09/14 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
USE PARAGRAPHS!! Also capitalize names, use spaces, proofread, proofread a second time, and think about what you write. Does it make sense? A one year old playing baseball? A one year old that is suddenly four? Someone that is that vague about how old their cousin is, and a four year old that would agree to saying they are one?
None of that makes any sense.