Reviews For Sissy by my school
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Reviewer: Natasa Jacobs Signed Report
Date: 03/06/19 04:51 am Title: Chapter 1

Very interesting story

Reviewer: Arial Signed star Report
Date: 06/10/14 10:11 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow. My eyes are bleeding from reading this. x_x

Reviewer: Natasa Jessica Signed Report
Date: 06/10/14 12:44 am Title: Chapter 1

weird story.

Reviewer: Valentine Signed star Report
Date: 06/09/14 06:03 pm Title: Chapter 1

Can I give a negative score?

This story makes no sense from the beginning. Then just goes downhill.

There is a big key on the right side of your keyboard, use it.

What parents would allow this to be done to their child? What parents would leave thirteen year olds home alone for a month. And I think the ending might constitute pedophilia, child porn, or at least statutory rape, but I am not sure what happened.

Author's Response: It's a fake story I'm justing making stuff up

Reviewer: The Storyteller guy Signed star Report
Date: 06/09/14 10:07 am Title: Chapter 1

.....holy shit. This is just.... Terrible. The plot is... Terrible. The writing is- okay, you see where I'm going with this? Look, if you're going to put up a story, put some bloody EFFORT into it!

Reviewer: Andrew5000 Signed starstar Report
Date: 06/09/14 02:50 am Title: Chapter 1

I like the concept but this was agonizing to read. I'm usually not one to care much for grammar but I could barely understand what was being said. You need to break this up into paragraphs just to make it easier to follow. Also, don't do so many run on sentences and use commas when one idea stops and another one begins if you do have them in the same sentence.
You have good ideas but need to be a little more clear and concise with your writing.

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