Date: 05/12/14 11:28 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is starting to look like a story I read on a different site a long time ago, and barely have any recollection of. Did you have any inspiration from somewhere?
Author's Response: Not one insperation in particular but, I am not surprised that it might resemble another story since I read a lot of them
Date: 05/08/14 04:09 am Title: Chapter 1
Two spelling errors I found: Which instead of "wich" and and course instead of "Cource." You also misspelled animal, though that looks like a typo.
Not bad for a first chapter, though it is a bit short. I'll be waiting for your next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks, I will edit it :) Anyway, it has been a long time since I wrote anything. I will try to finally get chapter 3 online within a week.
Date: 05/06/14 10:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooookay. Even if this is your first story. DUDE, like DUDE. It's way to fucking short! Even for a prologue. I can't properly review the story because there ain't no story to review! It's cool how you set the agency as the shield one, I'm also a huge fan of Marvel comics. Try to write more, to pass the one thousand or two thousand word count. I don't say that your story is bad or anything, but you really have to write more to make up a story! In this small chapter, what we got? A FENCE employee named Liam, who used a men in black gadget to grab a machine called D6N9A...
And? No plot, no setting, no personalities, no background, no etc.. You get my point? I'm not going to rate the story because I hope the next chapter is better, and if it is, I'll give a proper rating to it.
Being simple, keep it up! Let's see where you take us.
Author's Response: Yeah, thats true, it is way too short indeed and, well this kind of review was what I was hoping for, a list of things I missed. Lucky for me, chapter 2 is about 200 words by now. I will make it to a minimum of 750 before uploading. And there is a plot comming, if you like captain america, you will like this plot. If I can manage to write it down properly anyway xD. Thanks for the review.