Date: 04/03/18 08:51 pm Title: Epilogue
Great story. I feel as though I have to say that. I really enjoyed it. But..
I'm devastated. I've been so emotionally invested in such a lovable character only to see it end like that. I'm sure you have a greater picture well thought out. But this end have tainted the story for me and I just can't go on to read the rest of the series. I must say I think you made a mistake ending it like that.
Yet, I feel I have to give it 5 stars, since I've enjoyed the story so much. Up until this last point.
Author's Response: This was, indeed, a rough decision to make in the story. However, rather than backing out (a la., Square-Enix/Final Fantasy with Episode Ignis) and messing up the whole story whilst trying to provide a happy ending to this character, at least just yet, I went through with it because this one event carries heavy consequences for the next two stories, even after a certain major event happens in the third story that, I guarantee you, you will be missing out (and I don't want to spoil here). Aside from this, I'm sorry if this ending ruined the trilogy for you, because I tried to make three good stories here, with this one being the prequel to what was originally meant to be a one-off. I would be honored if you gave the other installments a chance, but I fully understand your sentiment here. I liked this character too, and still do.
Date: 02/02/18 06:26 am Title: Chapter 1
The ending was um, not too good. the story was being set up to where the MC would just go back to a normal civilian and when you raped and killed her with a minor character. It caused me hours of depression
Author's Response: I am sorry you felt this way. As it happens, this story is a prequel and a tragedy in a narrative sense. I wish I could have reneged on her fate, given what was revealed in the original story, but this happened and continues to play out in terms of consequences in the rest of the trilogy. If you would like a much happier ending then I recommend the other parts, including the trilogy's finale. It doesn't undo what happens in this ending, but I like to think it helps reconcile things.
Date: 10/19/15 04:26 pm Title: Chapter 38
I would, but I've known what was going to happen to Judy since halfway through These Tights. I'll be impressed if I do end up needing tissues, to be honest, but I suspect you have the capability to do it, so the question is did you manage? We'll find out tomorrow, I guess...
Date: 10/19/15 01:49 pm Title: Chapter 38
i had not realised this story was a prequel till a week ago and now i kinda know what to expect and im sad... you really know how to spin a tale... it's unfair for poor judy but i do have a question...
Author's Response: ...yes?
Date: 10/08/15 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 33
Your writing style is really excellent. You find the perfect balance between formality and colloquialism. Something about the dialogue seemed 'off' to me at the beginning of the story but that feeling quickly dissipated as the stort progressed. Great work overall.
Date: 10/08/15 04:21 pm Title: Chapter 33
Now, that's a cliffhanger of the type I haven't seen in a while. My last review included indifference, this one is me settling my heart and blood so that I don't curse at you
Author's Response: This one did take a lot of build-up. I mean, major cliffhangers in a prequel? That takes effort.
Date: 10/06/15 04:41 pm Title: Chapter 31
I'm finding this... well, I've been rather indifferent after many of these chapters, and I'm not so sure why. Could be that I roughly know the ending, possibly not, I don't know. Don't get me wrong, it's a good and interesting story, but it just doesn't click with me like it used to.
Author's Response: I have a feeling that feeling's pretty close to the rest of the site's regulars at this point. It's largely why I'm trying to finish this one and write up the third story when I'm not busy with other things, so I can walk away from the trilogy knowing it's done, and finally move on to other projects.
Date: 10/01/15 04:13 pm Title: Chapter 29
Romeo and Juliet was terrible. Plot-wise at least, and I don't think I'm qualified to judge Mr. Shakespeare's writing skill
Author's Response: It really was, and it was a bad example of "love," too. That was pretty much the point made by Judy's English teacher saying not to read the traditional play.
Date: 09/28/15 04:22 pm Title: Chapter 26
Italics never ended. Even the "More to come?" and beyond before favorite buttons is italicized.
Author's Response: I don't know how I missed both of those instances of my keyboard leaving out the '/' stroke, but it's fixed now. Leave it to my bad keyboard to break the site.
Date: 09/23/15 04:27 pm Title: Chapter 24
So your chapters tend to jump around annoyingly often. I just want to say that now, it's a bit hard to tell how much time passes. Not between this one and the last, but in other it's quite the jump
Author's Response: Well, there are two reasons to keep in mind for the frequent. 1) The whole story is over the course of 9-ish months. 2) I'm sure people don't want 50+ chapters of practically nothing of interest happening.
Date: 09/17/15 04:37 pm Title: Chapter 21
I was about to, VERY VERY CLOSE, to spouting out things like in the days of Minikisa's daily postings before I remembered I have a lot more to read, and that should, at some point, tide me over.
I feel like the grammar for that sentence is terrible.
Author's Response: I had a feeling you might. *cackles*
Date: 09/16/15 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 20
Hm? Where is this all heading, I wonder? I wouldn't mind knowing, do I really have to wait for Friday?
Author's Response: I'm hoping for a MTWR release schedule this week, but it depends on whether I can finish my current chapter I'm writing by tonight. As for where this is headed... heheh....
Date: 09/11/15 03:14 pm Title: Chapter 17
Oh, really now? That's interesting... still only have suspicions I refuse to voice on the identity of Swan Diva though, but if it is who I think it is that'll lead to an interesting situation...
Author's Response: I'm sure it seems blatantly obvious to much of the audience, but the main characters have yet to truly figure it out.
Date: 09/09/15 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 16
Yay pickpockets! An under-appreciated art this day and age. Seriously, that takes skill. Yay for her!
Author's Response: I do enjoy quirky pickpockets. Not quite kleptomaniacs, but not so innocent that your things won't go missing.
Date: 09/01/15 05:50 pm Title: Chapter 13
I don't really know what to say about this chapter either. It's so... well, set-up-ish
Author's Response: That's because the first third of a story is meant to set things up. Now, the vast majority of characters have been introduced, you know that the main character is adjusting to a huge change in her life, and you know that there's a big, somewhat mysterious plot point she has to contend with. Every other subplot, event, or new character or revelation will only serve to add to one or both of those - the new life and the mystery.
Date: 08/31/15 02:30 pm Title: Chapter 12
Hm... okay, yeah. Superhero business, the gruesome kind.
Author's Response: At least it wasn't super gory in how I described it. But yeah, it did get a little dark right there. There's a reason for Judy/Pixeletta seeing the darker side of things amidst the light.
Date: 08/30/15 11:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
Been a while since a Paragon Verse story pulled me in like this... actually, I think the last one that did was actually written by Minikisa back when the continuity was first established!
I like how it's coming along, and I'm looking forward to seeing this story of a young superheroine discovering herself unfold!
Author's Response: I miss Kisa and her work. I figure that I not only owe it to myself to actually finish this story and the third part in my own trilogy, but I owe it to her to finally say and do it all so that, if she ever comes back, there will be plenty that's happened that she can come back to. It's good to know that people are genuinely enjoying this one.
Date: 08/27/15 07:16 am Title: Chapter 10
Ooh, Paragon Verse story! Now I don't feel so alone posting mine! Whenever I do that...
Okay, now for a review. Uh.... yeah. Other than remembering this is the story I know the ending to, because it's a prequel to your other one, I don't know what to say. So far so good
Author's Response: Yes, things have felt a bit lonely around Paragon without Minikisa, or even the half dozen other writers contributing to it. I'm glad to be continuing this work and to still have it be welcome and enjoyed.
Date: 09/08/14 06:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
How'd you get permission to use paragon city?
Author's Response: Minikisa and I only started writing stories taking place in our own Paragon City, which makes nods to the city from that online game we both loved. It's more of an homage than a fanfic, really.
Date: 09/04/14 10:25 am Title: Chapter 1
It's a pretty good story, but it would really help if you put in more descriptions. The dialogue is great and the characters are realistic, but it's almost like I'm reading a play instead of a story for fairly large sections. Which is a bit of a shame.
Author's Response: That's just a habit of mine when there's a lot to say and not a lot to do. I will work on that, though.
Date: 09/04/14 02:19 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, I was thinking Ohm Wire since Jude has yet to decide on her female name, but I had forgotten about Pixie(my name for Pixeletta). I hope not though as Pixie met with a rather tragic end if I remember correctly.
Author's Response: That she did. Which kinda makes this like a Shakespearean tragedy. Only, don't be 100% sure of anything.
Date: 09/03/14 03:26 pm Title: Chapter 4
This is shaping up real show, but good. I really liked the bit with the note.
Author's Response: Of course. I didn't want to rush the first part of the story before the transformation happens, but I didn't want to make it dull or dry or drawn on too long.
Date: 09/03/14 12:28 pm Title: Chapter 4
After my last review, I had a though: What if Jude is Ohm Wire? This chapter doesn't change that suspicion.
Author's Response: Kyra is Ohm Wire. You're probably thinking of Pixeletta, which I will neither confirm nor deny as of yet.
Date: 09/03/14 10:37 am Title: Chapter 4
No reaction!? Oh, come on. Four words. You could of done it in FOUR WORDS. But, nope. You needed a cliffhanger.
Author's Response: Keep in mind that Jude officially has a lot on his mind, so just one simple reaction won't be enough.
Date: 09/02/14 01:05 pm Title: Chapter 3
Hmm... I'm wondering what it was that the drug did to Jude. Did it simply give him power? Did it have transformative attributes? Did Jude somehow become his idol? And what of Swan Diva? Is she going to be alright with the knowledge that she allowed herself to lose control and kill someone?
Author's Response: Most of this will be answered very soon. I can say no more without spoiling any of it.
Date: 09/02/14 10:39 am Title: Chapter 3
The celebration of last chapter is over now. Everyone, please help clean up this confetti. You can leave it on the edge of the cliff, that's where Paragon Girl ended.
Author's Response: Silly Person, of course there are going to be cliffs here and there.
Date: 09/01/14 09:20 pm Title: Chapter 2
Interesting start! I honestly wonder where this is heading. And no cliffhanger! I know one's coming in the future, but hey! Celebrate where you can, right?
Author's Response: Also a good sign. When you've read the story that takes place afterward and the prequel still leaves you curious to see what happens next? Oh yeah... And I'll save the cliffhangers for when the story actually needs them. *grins*
Date: 09/01/14 01:30 pm Title: Chapter 2
Something tells me that Jude has already met his idol. Very interesting start to this prequel, I hope to read more soon!
Author's Response: It's an interesting start to a greater story, I hope. And I'm glad you're liking it so far.
Date: 04/20/14 09:01 am Title: Chapter 1
Honey, I think you broke grover.
Don't worry, grover, it's not David. Prequel, remember? :P
I really liked the set-up, Julian/Judy is already quite likable! Looking forward to more ^_^
Author's Response: I'm looking forward to writing more. Now to try finishing the core story with the limited time I got. (Yay for writing things out of order)