Date: 04/02/14 08:05 pm Title: Fire 3 - An Unlikely Turn of Clothing?
So reading this its a good start to a very interesting story. The Spelling of many words needs to be fixed though. I also noticed that well even though you had the school outfit be with pants instead of a skirt, the character ended up with a skirt. most school uniforms for the girls will consist of both pants and skirts now days for schools or they will be just skirts for girls. it kind of seems odd that a girl would have to be punished with having to wear a skirt even if it dose say something ridiculous on it.
Author's Response: You have done your research thats for sure. One the the skirt was just something I came up with in the spur of the moment. I tend not to think things through alot of the time. originally it was going to be a straight jacket but thought it to be going a little to far. second, the reason behind the bad spelling is do to the fact that I am writing this on a 3DS.
Date: 03/31/14 02:59 pm Title: Fire 1 - The Red Chest
i like the story, but your grammar is a little off such "how about know" should be "no"
Author's Response: sorry about that I was doing it on a three DS and its a little harder to keep get the grammar right on that thing