Date: 03/02/14 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Amelia wants to conquer the world? But then when will she have the time to get SCIENCE done?! Conquering the world is a bit too time heavy...And then she has to fight people, possibly her own sister again. She's going to need to plan. A lot!
Anyway look forward to seeing where the sequel goes! Seems like it'll be a lot of fun! While you write some nice erotica scenes I think you're far better at the zany fun that you highlighted a bit more here.
Author's Response: Amelia prefers to call it 'world optimization', not conquering. Let's face it, it's in dire need of upgrades, and Amelia just knows better than the rest of the world *nods*
Date: 03/02/14 05:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hmm. I think either Riora is just some really old, really whimsical person who helps when she wants to and joins who she sees as the strongest side (But then she can see lots of things, and must know her limits, so this seems unlikely at this point) or she's trying to redeem Amelia. Personally, I think Amelia is beyond redemption, but then I'm myself, so who knows. Too early at this stage to speculate.
Author's Response: *whistles innocently* I'll never tell.
Date: 03/02/14 02:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Don't take this the wrong way but Person42 is like an abused spouse. Doesn't like the abuse but is always back for more... Not that I'm judging. I told myself I wouldn't be back to read anymore for a few weeks... Lasted about a day before I hit refresh.
Well I shouldn't have been surprised her new friend is a deity and is it just me or have you leveled up your cliffhangers.
So is Riora like a female Raiden who confuses past and future? That's tense.
Author's Response: They always come back for more! *maniacal laughter* I don't know who Raiden is, but yes, future and past are a little...blurry to her.
Date: 03/02/14 10:51 am Title: Chapter 1
OH... what a delight... Amelia has a new "minion" that is obviously on par with her...
This can only spell doom for the poor heroes of Paragon Universe!
Author's Response: *giggles* Methinks the minion will be pulling the strings here...
Date: 03/02/14 10:01 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh no! I loved the whole Minority Report deal with the apple changing Little Timmie's fate or was it little Jimmy? I saw both names in that paragraph. Riora is just a little off her rocker, but just maybe she'll be able to challenge Amelia in a good way.
From the malfunctioning laser I have to wonder if she isn't something of a jinx too, but that might've been just for dramatic license. :)
Author's Response: Arrrgh, damn it Search and Replace, Y U fail me? It's Timothy v.v Jim is my placeholder name for when I'm feeling lazy. Achem. Anyway! Glad you liked it, and yes, Riora's demented mind will indeed offer quite a challenge to Amelia! The laser malfunctioned at that precise moment because Riora foresaw it would - she chose the moment where she could approach Amelia and actually survive ;)
Date: 03/02/14 09:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Yay Amelia sequel! woo. oh no she conquers!...hmm does that mean shes built a love machine? love conquers all and all that... (oh my god that joked was so bad i hate myself but i cant bring myself to delete it)
Author's Response: Sh. Shhhh. Never feel ashamed for terrible jokes. My stories are filled with them.