Date: 08/13/14 12:00 pm Title: Chapter 5
I'm thoroughly interested in where this story is going. I've never read any of the paragon series but if they are nearly as good as this, I'm definitely going to check it out.
Author's Response: I definitely recommend it. In my opinion, the other authors who are involved with the Paragon-verse series are much better than I am.
Date: 03/13/14 06:33 pm Title: Chapter 3
Wow , loved this chapter,this is going to be a fun story,excellent job! I didn't know a bath would be so dangerous !
Author's Response: Well I'm sure you've never been in an unfamiliar body with a woman who wanted to shame you before... or have you?
Date: 02/28/14 09:50 am Title: Chapter 1
Excellent start to your story. The shifting perspective works well. You have me hooked.
Ophiophagus hannah Hamadryad ?? The King Cobra. Interesting 'zoo'.
Author's Response: Oh yes, it is very interesting indeed. More details to come in future chapters.
Date: 02/28/14 12:41 am Title: Chapter 1
Interesting start! Nice use of perspective to mask what was happening at first, nice descriptions capturing how much Ronald had changed, and really intriguing situation you've got poor Ronald in. Revenge TG stories are so fun - they're either cathartic pieces from the villain's perspective, or fun because, well, TG, heh. And from the sound of this zoo, maybe a bit more!
If I were to suggest anything, I don't think I've got quite a grasp on Ronald's character yet. Not sure if he's a relative innocent in this, or someone who deserves what's coming, or how much he's changed from when Jennifer started this long-standing grudge.
Good start! Curious what comes next! Rock on!
Author's Response: Thanks for the suggestion, I'll definitely be delving more into Ronald's background and how he relates to Jennifer.
Date: 02/27/14 10:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
I also commented on this on the doc like two minutes after you left (feel free to read there). Here's to your new story and where it goes. *Raises cup of tea*
Author's Response: Thank you and I didn't realize that was you, sorry about that. I hope I can continue to ask you for help in the future.