Date: 02/28/16 02:10 am Title: Chapter 1 - This Strange New Feeling
I never even mentioned the katana. And katanas are FAR lighter than loaded guns. Katanas, by design, are meant to be light. But even going beyond that, let's say that a child that little were somehow able to hold a loaded pistol (and that's a pretty huge if), firing it would be even more of a stretch. The kick from it's recoil would be enough to rip the pistol out of their grasp. Hell, it could probably hurt the kid's arms, or their shoulders. And as another person pointed out, chambering the bullet would be even less possible. Since this is clearly a fictional story, I can accept it, but to try and avidly defend your flawed logic (as you seem to be trying to do) seems a bit ridiculous.
Author's Response: I should really fix this story a little. Make it realistic for a child. I will look up guns that kids can be able to hold with no problem and change it to that.
Date: 01/31/16 01:16 pm Title: Chapter 1 - This Strange New Feeling
There's a big difference between holding a loaded gun and an unloaded gun. Specifically, a loaded gun is much heavier. I'm not saying it's impossible, but a child being able to hold a gun that is loaded is highly improbable
Author's Response: As I was saying on another comment. A katana is heavier. And I had a 4 year old hold an unsharpened katana. So it is possible, it depends on the gun as well.
Date: 01/03/16 07:03 am Title: Chapter 1 - This Strange New Feeling
One huge, major, super, humongous, gargantuan mistake... 6-year olds aren't strong enough to even hold a pistol, much less chamber the bullet. Story gets a bit repetitive at times like urinating/deficating every other moment but otherwise, a good, fresh story!
Author's Response: Thats not actually true. I have a friend that has a little 4 year old girl. We had her hold a non loaded pistol to prove it can be held. Also we had her hold a non sharpened katana, which is heavier and she was able to hold it as well. So, it can be done.
thanks for commenting.
Date: 11/18/15 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 14: From Dusk Til Dawn
Ever watch the 'From Dusk Till Dawn' trilogy? Your title and mentioning of vampires reminded me of that series... XP
Author's Response: Yeah, I have seen the first one only. 4 stars? What made it 1 star less?
Date: 09/27/15 12:42 am Title: Chapter 10: Finger lickin' good
A very good story story so far, yet there are some errors in every chapter so far that needs fix'in; but it's of no pressing issue to fix 'em right away...
Author's Response: Don't worry. The errors and issues are going to be or worked on. I got someone that said she will help me.
Date: 07/17/14 08:24 pm Title: Chapter 1 - This Strange New Feeling
This story is pretty good. Looking forward to more. One small thing: If the entire zombie thing was just Natalie's imagination about a movie, how did she go from knowing about firearms, to being just a scared little girl watching a movie? However, this isn't enough of a reason to dislike this story. Looking forward to new chapters!
Author's Response: New Chapter is out, But its not what you expected.
Date: 06/29/14 08:14 pm Title: Chapter 5 - Mommy I'm Scared!
mmm not a bad way to end the zomibies, a movie. pretty good idea actually. and love teh ending now at least nat will have a new play mate her age :) loved teh new chapter
Author's Response: Yep princess panty boy set it up to make it a movie. I thought of adding a new playmate for Natalie. She would have no friends if this didn't happen.
Date: 06/29/14 01:48 am Title: Chapter 5 - Mommy I'm Scared!
Love this story and the plot line.
Wanted more of the ikky zombies..
Can't wait to read more
Author's Response: Sorry if I took away the zombies. I couldn't keep it in the story. I have big plans for Natalie. The zombies was just a way to trick you into thinking zombies were taking over. Don't worry the best is coming.
Date: 02/21/14 02:34 am Title: Chapter 1 - This Strange New Feeling
You did a very good job of describing the upcoming transformation, fully deserving of 5 stars. My only critique is with some of the dialogue. The foreshadowing by the scientist is too on the nose (though out of context it is very well done!), and the mother seems way too much like a pushover to be believable as a mom.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like this chapter. I worked on adding to it. Chapter 2 was written by me and Princess_Panty_boy. It took a while to get back to this story. But with help from her, I am back. NATASA JESSICA =^.^=