Date: 12/24/13 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Now, let's see what's going on:
1. Hundred and fourteen words. Passes for a school work, fail as a story big time.
2. The amount of grammar problems is TERRIBLE, I've been there, and I'm okay with it. I use a software named "Ginger", which is good for Word, but also for the internet. My grammar is also getting better, but I have a long way to go, but it can't hurt you downloading that program (Basic understatement of English is still required).
3. Use your categories right. Unless you work on some secret lab where you can morph guys into girls (And if you do, at least 50% of this place will buy from you the stock), your story is Sci-Fi one.
In general, this thing doesn't even deserve to be called a story, BUT (and I say it big time), if you use some tips, make your stories longer and you will practice, you may create even a masterpiece like I did (Hey, every dad likes to brag about his children)
Date: 12/24/13 08:13 am Title: Chapter 1
I won't dignify this post with false praise.
This is pure shit. You just wasted your own time and ours. This was not worth the effort of the click.
I don't care if you're typing this on a cell phone; if that's your excuse, then quit using the wrong tool.
Don't post this garbage. It makes a fool out of you.