Date: 11/20/13 01:49 pm Title: Part 1
I thought this story was fairly well written, with the exception of a few minor grammatical mistakes. The hero seems like a normal joe, stuck in a (very) weird situation. What bothered me about this story were some elements that touched on my "squidge factor" - you know, where you just feel damn uncomfortable? Like when the hero meets his wife after the accident and umm... gets her off. Ewww. Anyway, I plan on reading a few more chapters, to see if my impression changes (for better or for worse) - its hard getting a story off the ground, and the first chapter is always the hardest. I'm definitely willing to cut the author some slack and keep reading! This story will definitely appeal to some readers - I think perhaps a warning in the notes about some of the content might have been appropriate.