Date: 11/19/14 05:58 pm Title: Life with Brian
You write VERY well Rebecca, hard to believe this is your first story anywhere. Your storyline was well thought-out and characters seemed complete with fairly easy to understand motivations, especially Brian. I won't judge how Chris of Brian behaved, but my one real comment would have to be Chris' motivation for accepting everything. Not so much what his actions in the story were, but rather his reasoning... and there's usually a longer history of desiring the things that changed TO happen. So Chris had some gaps, and it would have been nice to see how both families took the news... Acceptance Is Everything. Especially when it comes to the family of the TG... yes? Anyway your writing skills are well honed, your dialog was well timed and scene progression was well paced and made sense (many new authors tend to jump around and can lead to problems with the tense used, etc). Thank you for sharing a great read, and will be looking for more! 5 *s. Cheers! --- Josie
Date: 10/08/13 01:49 am Title: Life with Brian
This story is a classic. I can remember reading it for the first time more than ten years ago - probably closer to fifteen. THere are several aspects to this story; forced fem being one of them. However, the change was welcomed and quite successful. I guess the next chapter would have to deal if chris went 'all the way. I wonder if the relationship lasted.