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Reviewer: Hayley Holly Grace Sissy Boy Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/13 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 1

Got a similar story coming out. This is such fun to read. Very good story

Reviewer: BalletBoyJamie Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/25/13 07:59 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow, do I ever love your stories. Even the way you use English, forgive me if this sounds odd, but I love how it makes the story feel just a little bit foreign, as if you are telling us how things are in a parallel universe or something... at least, that's how I imagine it, giggle!

I really loved the storyline in this one. The only improvement for future stories I'd recommend is try to just sort of mention any mind control / brainwash stuff in a more subtle way. Just sort of mention it in passing, so that us readers have to figure things out for ourselves.

I love your writing and hope you continue, especially with stories like this!

Reviewer: Princess_Panty_boy 92646 Signed Report
Date: 08/24/13 07:35 am Title: Chapter 1

Fun story Hun. I hope you continue it. Thanks for sharing.

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Princess panty boy

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