Date: 07/14/14 04:43 am Title: The first day
Amazing, the combination of action, romance, comedy, and tragedy all into one story is so overwhelming, but in the best way possible! This may be the best story I have ever read, and not just on this site! You are a genius Person 42!
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so much! I never thought I would ever get to hear a review like that! It means a lot to me. Glad you loved the story!
Date: 08/22/13 10:14 am Title: The first day
Hmm, good plot, but the actions, changes, and events are too quick.
You need to make more descriptions about the why the governement is interested in Holly for exemple, or not going from one event to another without transition.
Keep up the good work, U have a good imagination but still lack a little on how writting.
Good luck, loooking foward to the next chapters.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'll make sure to do some background soon.
Date: 08/21/13 07:43 am Title: Revealing
I like how you are giving the protagonist two different changes early on, makes adapting that much harder. Also I just wanted to let you know that the formatting and spacing make it easy to get lost on the page.
Author's Response: It has trouble copying from where I can get it, I'll try to fix it with the later chapters
Date: 08/21/13 02:17 am Title: Revealing
best story so far ever it has action adventure slight romance and weapons nice you should like write more of these man? woman? person cool
Author's Response: Thank you! I plan on finishing this one and going in a different direction for a while, though.