Date: 04/03/19 10:56 pm Title: The Hunt of a Lifetime
Wow, what a story. I pictured Royce winding up with Dave, the rest of the world be damned! They were best friends their whole lives after all.
I hope Alyssa stayed a part of Royce's life. She was there for him when he really needed it. BTW, right out of high school Alyssa would have gone to undergrad to earn a four-year Bachelor's degree before attending medical school. She could have easily done that at the same school Royce attended and they could have remained close.
All-in-all a great story. Because of your writing skills I felt like I was right in the middle of it. I look forward to working my way through your list of stories. Thank you.
Date: 04/03/19 10:17 pm Title: The Hunt of a Lifetime
I'm curious what Royce told people as the reason for his changes. Did he go through the whole medical situation? It doesn't seem like he would have told everyone he had decided to have a sex change. Wasn't too clear from the description of the party.
Date: 04/03/19 10:15 pm Title: The Hunt of a Lifetime
It's good to see the college is doing everything possible to accommodate Royce and a scholarship.
You seem to know a lot about the scholarship rules or else you do a ton of research to support your stories. Either way, it speaks highly of you as an author.
Date: 04/03/19 10:04 pm Title: The Hunt of a Lifetime
I'm surprised Alyssa didn't invite Royce to celebrate with her family.
It was great that Dave stuck up for Royce when the guys were harassing her.
It also says a lot that Dave quit the party to spend time with Royce.
Man, I'm getting emotionally invested in this story. Thanks.
Date: 04/03/19 09:51 pm Title: The Hunt of a Lifetime
I'm glad Royce decided to embrace his new anatomy. I'm disappointed that the relationship between Royce and Alyssa will become strictly platonic, although I understand. Life can be so unfair at times.
This has been a great story so far, and totally believable as a TG plot.
Your writing is excellent, and I look forward to reading more.
Date: 05/20/14 12:35 pm Title: The Hunt of a Lifetime
I'm usually not a fan of Realistic TG, but this one was a pretty nice read story and character-wise.
However, my advice is to revise the chapters and break them up into smaller sections. I am talking about paragraphs. When writing a story online, it is better to hit enter twice after finishing a paragraph rather than indenting it a bit. It's the best if you can do both, but indenting on its own can be exhausting on the eyes.
Date: 05/16/14 03:52 pm Title: The Hunt of a Lifetime
Things happened far too fast physiologically, and in spite of our wishes, the Adams Apple and voice changes just won't happen regardless of the drugs taken, nor will hair grow appreciably faster. But, this is a fantasy. That's okay. I hope Alyssa was her maid of honor.
Author's Response: Lol. I know right. Too bad though. Thx